Friday, March 18, 2016

Week Nine Revision, discussion board two a little light surgery


Wishing a Prison

Nothingness burns in a forsaken circle around me.
Close to the edge,  I carefully walk toward an exit and halt a moment,
not knowing where I am going, starkly gazing at the empty sky and
what is waiting at the next turn of fate.

Compelled to rearrange objects, thoughts, meaning,
hopeful it will hide the mess that has been made, that has become our lives. 
Hot and tired, salty sweat drips to my lips, the pain burns, yellow, searing. 
A meager voice imploring to be released from loneliness and hollow doubt. 

Interruptions in the dark and empty night of silent waiting and wanting,
words building a bridge to nowhere. 
Bridges suspended in air, high and proud, white and  wandering,
worthless and haranguing. 

 Wishing away the days and time,
tempted by everything, anything that may shatter the spell
that keeps me stubbornly trying to make a life of stale uncertainty.

Mute in a prison made of wishes.


Following is the draft that I revised for the above poem 

Interruptions

Yellowed, searing,
hot and tired.
Fed up with you and the
mess

and trying to clean it up.
Trying to make a life of your trite problems. 
Of nothingness, of not knowing.
Weary of struggling to fulfill your requests, answer your questions.

Worn out from watching your t.v. shows, listening to your
interruptions.
All the while explaining myself, justifying, asking,
imploring.

Stuffing it all back down
so I won't be disappointed with your response.
Wondering when it will end, betting that I can be strong and take it and
come out on top unaffected.

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