Sunday, January 31, 2016

Chapter 7 Anaphoric List Poem

Lying In Bed At Night

If you live with a madman you cancel dinner with friends with thinly veiled excuses
If you live with a madman you sit on your bed at night listening to the thud of books crashing against the wall in the next room
When you tell your frightened three year old you will protect him your stomach turns over
And you no longer recognize the shy student with bedroom eyes you once thought you knew
If you live with a madman you find your things in a garbage bag in front of the door
If you live with a madman you hide your mother's jewelry
If you live with a madman you cry into your sleeping son's hair at night
If you live with a madman you take care not to stir his rage, inflame his fury
If you live  with a madman you swallow hard and bite your tongue
If you live with a madman you plan your escape, pray for deliverance and wonder what you have done to provoke the wrath
If you live with a madman you lie still in your bed at night when his footsteps creep along the floors, never knowing what may come of his nighttime wandering
If you live with a madman you know you will need to disappear, slip away stealthily without saying good-bye to friends
If you live with a madman you stuff the pain back down, hoping it will end, betting that you can be strong and take it and come out on top

Unaffected

1 comment:

  1. This is another intense poem, Lisa. Who can read it without also sharing that fear? The job of the writer is to "not look away from the difficult moment" and you do that here, reporting the hard truth of this living situation with details that make it real. If I would advise anything, it might be that in future drafts you can move away from some of the anaphora--maybe not so many repeats of "If you live" and lastly, while I have no doubt this person was a "madman" that word, when the reader doesn't really know this person feels too laden, somehow, perhaps too telling. I hope this helps--

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